Evaluation

Final Draft of our Ancillary

This is our final newspaper advert for our Ancillary as a group.

Final Draft of our Ancillary

This is our final draft for the double page spread as a group.

2nd Draft Ancillary

This is my second draft of my newspaper advert for our documentary...
My teacher said that I she did like the English Dictioray on the side, but she did not understand why I placed the other book next to it, and the background pitcure was not clear enough for the audience to understand what the documentary was about. Therefore for our final Ancillaries I will be working on the picture, that should be clear and to have a straight impact on our audience.

2nd Draft Ancillary

This is my second draft of my Double Page Spread, my teacher said that she did like the way I was trying to represent technology and English Language in the picture, however she said that it wasn't working with the text, also that I didn't need to put the documentary's title on the page.

1st Draft Ancillary

This is my first draft of my newspaper advert, the things my teacher told me to improve on were:
* Picure- not sending out the right message about the documentary
* Layout

She did like the angle of the picture, however I need to work on my picture

1st Draft Ancillary

This is my 1st draft of my double page spread,my teacher said that I should improve on the picture as it was not sending out the right message about my documentary, she also said that the way I placed the texts was not clear enough for the readers to understand. She told me that my double page spread did not loook like a real media product, that I didn't need to place the logo on the page, so these are the things I will be improving for my second draft...

Research- Ancillary

Final Draft of our Documentary

Finally our final draft, a lot of work was put into this documentary and I'm quite happy with what we came up with. Looking back at our other drafts, we could clearly see the improvements made, the final documentary is not perfect but in my opinion it does send out the right message, it interacts with our target audience, it teaches everyone no matter what age different aspects of the language that they might not have come across before, there are different angles used throughout the documentary, the presenter had a balance with the language so that it was clear enough to all age groups who could possibly be interested in the topic, I also believe that the title given was understood when you watch the whole documentary and it makes people wanting to watch all the episodes.

Second Draft

This is our second draft, I must say that this was incomplete and it was not to our best standards. We need to improve by changing the beginning as it doesn't work, it is way too long and the audience will lose interest withing seconds of watching it. There was a problem with the sound which we need to sort out for our final draft, also there was not enough information (clearly because it was not complete).
However our teacher really liked the way we were using stop and start animation to interact more with our target audience, so we will continue to use that on our final draft.

R+P new idea

Research and planning: our new idea.
We broke our idea into different categories so that it would be easier to understand ando organise...

•TVand film - Victoria

•Radio- Tobore

•Internet- Mariana

•Mobile Phones- Jamilla

We researched the past and the future about the technology mentioned above and how it affected the language.

Documentary

This is a youtube video I found about the same subject that we are doing now for our new documentary idea:

New idea

Me and my group decided to come up with a new idea because our media teache (Miss Connell) thought that it would be better to talk about language within technology. How technology has had and still has an impact on the English Language.
We have then researched about the subject so that we could make a bew script and a new storyboard.