Research- Ancillary

Final Draft of our Documentary

Finally our final draft, a lot of work was put into this documentary and I'm quite happy with what we came up with. Looking back at our other drafts, we could clearly see the improvements made, the final documentary is not perfect but in my opinion it does send out the right message, it interacts with our target audience, it teaches everyone no matter what age different aspects of the language that they might not have come across before, there are different angles used throughout the documentary, the presenter had a balance with the language so that it was clear enough to all age groups who could possibly be interested in the topic, I also believe that the title given was understood when you watch the whole documentary and it makes people wanting to watch all the episodes.

Second Draft

This is our second draft, I must say that this was incomplete and it was not to our best standards. We need to improve by changing the beginning as it doesn't work, it is way too long and the audience will lose interest withing seconds of watching it. There was a problem with the sound which we need to sort out for our final draft, also there was not enough information (clearly because it was not complete).
However our teacher really liked the way we were using stop and start animation to interact more with our target audience, so we will continue to use that on our final draft.

R+P new idea

Research and planning: our new idea.
We broke our idea into different categories so that it would be easier to understand ando organise...

•TVand film - Victoria

•Radio- Tobore

•Internet- Mariana

•Mobile Phones- Jamilla

We researched the past and the future about the technology mentioned above and how it affected the language.

Documentary

This is a youtube video I found about the same subject that we are doing now for our new documentary idea:

New idea

Me and my group decided to come up with a new idea because our media teache (Miss Connell) thought that it would be better to talk about language within technology. How technology has had and still has an impact on the English Language.
We have then researched about the subject so that we could make a bew script and a new storyboard.

SLANGUAGE DOCUMENTARY 1st draft

As this was our first draft we had a lot to improve on... My teacher asked us to improve on the beginning of the documentary as it wasn't sending out the right message to the audience and might make people feel uncomfortable. There was no labelling on the interviews which leaft the audience not knowing who were the people talking throughout the documentary. Also, another thing we needed to improve on was the interaction, the documentary as a whole was not teaching the audience anything, it was not interesting enough to watch... Therefore with all the comments we are know going to sit down as a team and figure out a way to change bits and piecies to make our documentary a good entertainment for our target audience.