As this was our first draft we had a lot to improve on... My teacher asked us to improve on the beginning of the documentary as it wasn't sending out the right message to the audience and might make people feel uncomfortable. There was no labelling on the interviews which leaft the audience not knowing who were the people talking throughout the documentary. Also, another thing we needed to improve on was the interaction, the documentary as a whole was not teaching the audience anything, it was not interesting enough to watch... Therefore with all the comments we are know going to sit down as a team and figure out a way to change bits and piecies to make our documentary a good entertainment for our target audience.
